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Stephanie M. Vargo's avatar

Wow! You are commanded to shut out all else with only one master. This is terrifying. The height of control and domination. There is something chilling about these demands.

Rea de Miranda's avatar

A poem doesn’t automatically mean a relationship, Stephanie. It was a fleeting imagined moment.

B Philippe's avatar

So much tension! Very uncomfortable reading and very well done. 👏

Esther Stanway-Williams's avatar

Killer last line…eeek!

Marpy Hayse's avatar

Frightening.

AsukaHotaru's avatar

I actually caught myself holding my breath while reading this.

There’s such intensity in the way you captured that gaze — how everything dissolves until only two people remain, suspended in that pulse.

It feels tender and consuming all at once, like a moment that burns quietly long after it ends...

Rea de Miranda's avatar

This is a beautiful comment, AsukaHotaru! Thank you for feeling my intention. ❤️

Adrian's avatar

That last line !

Rea de Miranda's avatar

Thank you, Adrian. You get it.

Toni Sakoman's avatar

While I died a million little deaths... 🖤

Josh Datko's avatar

I will play Depeche Mode's World in my Eyes on repeat for you today :)

Rea de Miranda's avatar

Take you on a long trip… Wow Josh! My heart.

gēnu's avatar

Wow, this really captures a strong feeling that I’m sure many of us have had before. What great writing!

Rea de Miranda's avatar

Thank you for your appreciation!

Jaap Stijl's avatar

This reminded me of a few lines in this Lucio Dalla song called 'Futura' -- "Ma non fermarti voglio ancora baciarti // Chiudi i tuoi occhi non voltarti indietro // Qui tutto il mondo sembra fatto di vetro"

Rea de Miranda's avatar

This is gorgeous, Jaap.

I had to look it up. Thank you for sharing with me.